Assignment 3-4

After reviewing my essay, I believe I need to work on my thesis and introduction paragraph so more.  I am not sure that it is not clear enough and/or easily understandable and might seem confusing to those who are not familiar with the topic.  Also in my later paragraphs I think that it might need some more examples and/or quotes from the text and go into more depth with what I am talking about.  Another thing that might need some more work is making sure that my paragraphs flow together and that the transitions are clear and make sense.